It's day two of the I'm Hearing Voices Blogfest. Today we "have two characters introduce each other using only dialogue—no backstory, no internalization, just dialogue between the two." It's such a challenge! It makes me realize I rely a lot on describing body language and the like. I am also really tempted to provide backstory right now, but I'll behave.
Emmy: “I’m supposed to give you clothes. I donate all my old clothes with my social responsibility club, so I don’t have anything smaller. The tops might be too big for you.”
Evangeline: (silence)
Emmy: “Why are you looking at them like that? What’s wrong with my clothes? You’d rather wear the shelter donated ones you have on now?”
Evangeline: (silence)
Emmy: “You can talk can’t you? I know you never went to a real school, but I thought you could at least talk. I know you can’t read.”
Evangeline: “I can read.”
Emmy: “How old are you?”
Evangeline: “12”
Emmy: “When is your birthday?”
Evangeline: “March 15th.”
Emmy: “I was still a freaking baby when you were born. That’s so gross. You know, you don’t even look anything like me. Do you look like her?”
Evangeline: “My mom? I guess so.”
Emmy: “Did you know my dad? Did he visit you? How much? Did you know he had other kids? Did he love her?”
Evangeline: “I don’t know.”
Emmy: “I don’t know to which question? You know whether or not he visited you.”
Evangeline: “Thank you for the clothes.”
Emmy: “You know, I know what you are. I can tell. They’re something evil about you.”
Evangeline: “I’m proud to be a dark witch."
Emmy: “That's sick. You shouldn't be proud. God doesn’t love witches.”
Evangeline: “You shouldn’t be proud to be a Mundane. It just means you’re ordinary. Pointless.”
Emmy: “Witches don’t get into Heaven.”
Evangeline: “So?”
Emmy: “So?”
Evangeline: “Then you think my mom is in Hell?”
Wow, with a sister like Emmy, who needs a Hell? Enticing dialogue. I want to Evangeline better. Emmy I have known too many of! :-) Roland
ReplyDeleteYES! So great! Um, MORE PLEASE! : )
ReplyDeleteThis is so cool Sharon :) The character dynamics are dynamite. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow. I got goosebumps. This story sounds so cool!
ReplyDeleteVery revealing! Sounds awesome!
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome - loved the voice, and I definitely want to read the story now!
ReplyDeleteWow, this was such an intense scene! I love Evangeline. She seems smart (despite the few words) for a 12 year old.
ReplyDeleteThis brings up so many questions! I really want to read more! Is this the one I'm going to beta?
ReplyDeleteooh, i really loved this! I have so many questions that i want answered! I would totally read more
ReplyDeleteI was drawn right into this from the very start! Great voices for the characters, I loved it!
ReplyDeleteWow! I love the way it devolved from the one girl giving the other clothes, to her being rather...mean. I would totally read more.
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